PAGE ONE
PANEL ONE:
Most of the page is taken up with this
panel. We can see David Huxley, from behind, lying on his desk.
He is a relatively good looking man, in his early thirties. He has
been on a serious binge for seven years, and looks it. He wears a
black leather trench coat, jeans and a shirt. He has passed out on
his desk and his clothes look rumpled and dirty. We are looking through
the window with binoculars from a roof top across the street. So
we are looking down on the scene. All the dialogue is from off camera
people. It is important to note that there is no phone or computer
in the office, no electronic device of any kind.
PANEL THREE:
Flip the perspective around so we are
looking head on at the stooges. The Finn looks old, and tired,
and mysterious, with his sunglasses and toque. He is tall and thin,
balding under his toque, with fashionable side burns. Lawrence
looks young, and angry. Smith is about the same age as The
Finn, fifty-ish, shorter, fatter, with more hair, and a beard. He
isn’t obese, but plump, and roundish. The Finn holds the binoculars
in his hand, he is no longer looking through them.
10 THE FINN: Or pity us the fools, for this world shall be lost.
PAGE TWO
PANEL ONE:
We’re inside David’s office now.
He lying on his desk. A bottle of scotch is open and resting beside
him. It is half empty. The office is cluttered, weird occult
type stuff is strewn about, books are open to myriad pages, loose leaf
files are stacked all over. Its not a huge panel, but try to incorporate
some of this stuff as we progress. He probably doesn’t have an apartment,
so this is his whole life in this office.
PANEL TWO:
Close up of David now. He is rolling
over on the desk, about to get up, looking at the camera. Get a sense
of despair in his eyes. They should look tired and old, older than
he physically appears. This is a guy who has spent seven years at
the bottom of a bottle, he’s pretty well pickled. But there is a
sense of hope to him too. And when he talks about Maggie his eyes
light up, and he almost smiles.
PANEL THREE:
Do a panel of a beautiful young woman
lying in bed. If we can see David note that his body is covered with
scar like tattoos, of all sorts of symbols and stuff, everything is tattooed,
except his face and hands. The girl is lying on her side, looking
at the viewer, who would be David, making her Maggie. She has long
reddish blonde hair, almost curly, but mostly just wavy. It’s shoulder
length, and strewn about, not really all that well styled.
PANEL FOUR:
Back to David, who is now sitting in his
chair, a little uneasily, holding his head, nursing a hang over, and listening.
His eyes have suddenly tensed, he is reaching out.
PANEL FIVE:
A shot from the front of the desk.
David has pushed himself away from the desk, as though he is about to stand
up. His arms are still leaning against the desk.
PAGE THREE
PANEL ONE:
A close up of The Finn’s feet, walking
up a flight of rickety stairs. I want this from the side, looking
at the railing’s pickets head on, and seeing the shoes between them from
the side. He’s wearing spats, on top of relatively well worn shoes,
black of course. His pants are grey, and have a cuff.
PANEL THREE:
A big, dramatic, bursting through the
door to the office type panel. Alaistare is the first through the
door. He is also the first to talk. He is clearly the leader,
in as much as there is a leader to this rag tag gang of false mages.
The other two stand at his sides, half hidden by the door frame.
3 ALAISTARE SMITH: David Huxley the world has need of ...
PANEL FOUR:
Flip around so we can see the office,
looking much as it did, but there is no one in the chair. David has
vanished. Be sure that the desk you have drawn all along has a covered
front (back?), whichever side it is that faces the door, as this is integral
to the joke.
PANEL FIVE:
Look back at the three stooges now.
They look perplexed, Jeff may be looking behind the door or something.
PAGE FOUR
PANEL ONE:
A similar shot to the preceding page’s
final panel, make sure they are looking in different directions, so the
reader knows there is nothing to see in the office. Jeff is cowering
behind Alaistare, who looks uncomfortable, The Finn looks nonchalant at
best. He betrays no emotion.
PANEL TWO:
We see David hiding under his desk, unable
to stop himself from cracking up. He is probably holding his hand
over his mouth, a tear running from his eye, anything to stop himself from
laughing.
PANEL THREE:
The three idiots have walked forward,
coming up to the desk. Jeff may have walked around it, looking for
a portal to another dimension or something, David for his part has stood
up. What perspective you use for this panel is entirely up to you.
PANEL FOUR:
Look at the three of them now, looking
embarrassed and a little angry. They don’t like showing how incompetent
they truly are. No dialogue.
David is looking at Jeff, Contempt dripping
from his voice.
PANEL SIX:
David has sat back down at his desk, his
face still shows his elation at the recent display, but the age and the
lack of sleep is starting to creep back in as well.
PAGE FIVE
PANEL ONE:
A close up of Alaistare, he suddenly looks
less like a jolly fat man, and more like a defeated old man. He gets
very dark, very serious, very not happy.
PANEL FOUR:
David gets that look back in his eyes,
maybe do the same type of shot as you did before, get a sense that this
is his last remaining power, he is listening, and worse, hears something.
PANEL FIVE:
David has begun to walk, and turns back
and points his fingers at the bewildered threesome. He is getting
pissed, and it shows.
PANEL SIX:
All three of these last panels have essentially
the same layout, no one moves, but facial expressions change, and other
things do as well, which will be explained as necessary. The four
of them are out in the hall, we can see David’s door, which they are standing
next too. David is the closest to us, he is lighting a cigarette.
Next is Alaistare, the other two are to be placed at your discretion.
Alaistare has a rather absent look on his face, he has no idea what is
about to take place.
PANEL SEVEN:
Same as the last, but the door and parts
of the wall have just exploded, well actually, are exploding, we can see
part of David’s name, which was painted on the door in the foreground,
the rest of the panel is basically explosion effect.
PANEL EIGHT:
Same as panel 6, but of course there is
no door left, nor much wall, the three stooges of mysticism stand coughing,
there is much dust still in the air. David is waving his hands to
clear the smoke, and looking at his coat, which has a small rip in the
upper sleeve.
PAGE SIX
PANEL ONE:
David has marched back into the office
again. Draw this from the side, he being clear, but the demon is
still shrouded in smoke. David is clearly looking down and shaking
his finger at what he presumes is a very short demon. Make this panel
the length of the top page, how big is up to you.
PANEL TWO:
Show a close up of David’s finger, and
the Demons waist that it is pointed at. The demon is far taller than
he had thought. Make this panel the length of the page as well.
Make it shorter than the above panel though.
PANEL THREE:
A panel a lot like the first, but the
smoke has cleared, and a very tall, mean, nasty looking demon is standing
in David’s office, well, what’s left of it. David is looking up at
him, and I mean up, and has lost his bravado, because he knows he is screwed.
PANEL FOUR:
A side view of David’s body flying into
the wall. He has been thrown, hard, but he survives, so don’t have
him squashed or anything. Lots of action lines, this is by far the
largest panel of the page, containing the most action.
PANEL FIVE:
David looks up, his lip is bleeding, maybe
his head too, a little, he seems all right though, like nothing is too
wrong.
PAGE SEVEN
PANEL ONE:
A close up shot of The Finn, he looks
his usual self. Despite what is going on.
PANEL TWO:
A big shot, we see David fighting the
demon, well sort of. Alaistare picks up a piece of rubble, and throws
it at the demon. He throws, to use a cliché, like a girl.
This was the guy last picked in public school, he can’t throw. The
rubble bounces off.
PANEL THREE:
A close up of David, probably with the
demon’s arm punching into a wall behind him, narrowly missing him, he glances
side ways, and screams in desperation.
PANEL FOUR:
A medium shot of Alaistare, a little confused.
PANEL FIVE:
The money panel for this page. David
is fighting the demon, well, okay, being pummeled by him. He shouts,
over the sounds of blows. He is probably trying to find some cover
or something.
PANEL SIX:
A shot of the three again. Lots
of room for dialogue. They are discussing the matter, so they should
be using gestures and stuff. The Finn should have his head resting
on his right arm, which in turn is resting on his left arm, I’ll explain
this in person or something. Jeff looks typically over reactive,
Alaistare looks, well, he looks like his bumbling self, not at all confident.
Try to have all that in the background, while in the foreground we can
see David fighting the Demon still.
PANEL ONEVEN:
A shot of Jeff, inset into the above panel,
small, like the two which follow it.
PANEL TWO:
A shot of Alaistare, like panel seven,
same size, think of a George Perez type layout.
PANEL NINTHREE:
The third of the triptych, ditto, except
it has The Finn.
PAGE EIGHT
PANEL FOUR:
A shot of David’s eyes, he has no pupils
in this shot, his irises are red and look like they’re on fire.
PANEL TWOFIVE:
Most of the page is taken up by this panel,
a huge blast of mystic force emanating from David, withering the Demon.
David may even be floating.
PANEL SIX:
A close up of David, the Demon is gone,
a smile on his face, for the first time.
14 DAVID HUXLEY: Well, what next?